Grammar Exercise- beachgirl6

Original

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude toward their child it increases the risk that they’re child will grow up hostile towards others. And its not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is because the children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling lifes disappointments. If you aren’t raised with coping skills, your much to likely to act ‘inappropriately’ then if you have developed more reasonable approaches. The affect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

Revised

A primary caretaker with a negative attitude increases the risk that her child will grow up hostile towards others. It’s not just aggression toward others that result from child abuse. Many children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The negative behavior children show results from being unable to handle life’s disappointments. Children raised without coping skills are more likely to act “inappropriately” than children who developed more reasonable approaches. The effect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers,” is that parents get the children they deserve.

One thought on “Grammar Exercise- beachgirl6”

  1. Terrific work, BeachGirl6. However, in correcting all the errors, some with radical changes, you introduced one of your own: It’s not just aggression toward others that result

    You can correct that any time.

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