Robust Verbs — Wisemann101

Original Paragraph:

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Revised Paragraph:

Heroin becomes a negative ultimate in Vancouver. The crime rate within the city increases, so as heroin addicts to crime ratio. The number one priority for heroin addicts is the fuel their addiction and they accomplish that by committing crimes. There is a program called ” free heroin for addicts” that provides free dosages for addicts. The objectives of the program is to limit the number of addicts in the hospitals. For some, the negative part is that this program does not cure but keeps addicts to be addicted.

Robust Verbs (2)- wildwood

First revision

Vancouver is currently reeling with heroin addicts committing crimes such as assaults, burglary, and stealing to support their illegal habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts from committing such crimes by conveying a safe venue and paraphernalia to get their daily fix to be able to function properly. This program will only support the addiction, not help addicts ween off using heroin. The “free heroin for addicts,” program will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital by providing sanitary needles, deterring addicts from reusing needle after needle. Hospitals having to deal with addicts that want to use unsanitary needles is a hopeless waste of resources that the hospital could divert to another patient with a much more serious ailment. This program gives addicts free and clean-cut heroin and by doing so, will help city resources such as police and EMTs focus on bigger issues and boost the quality of life.

Second revision

Vancouver has been reeling with the issue for some time of heroin addicts committing crimes such as assaults, burglary, and theft to support their illegal habits. The “free heroin for addicts,” program gives the addicts a way out from committing such violent crimes by conveying a safe venue and issuing free paraphernalia for addicted citizens so they can receive their daily fix to be able to function properly. “Free heroin for addicts,” will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital by providing sanitary needles, deterring addicts from reusing needle after needle. Hospitals dealing with addicts that choose to use unsanitary needles is a hopeless waste of resources that the hospital could divert to another patient with a more serious ailment. This program gives addicts free and clean-cut heroin and by doing so, will help city resources such as police and EMTs focus on bigger issues and boost the everyday quality of life.

Robust Verbs – jeprr1271

Heroin addicts in Vancouver commit crimes such as breaking, entering, and stealing and do whatever they can to get their hands on the drug. The program offers free “legal” heroin so that these addicts commit less crimes. This will also keep more heroin users out of the hospital by reducing the encountering of people who want to use bad drugs, unsanitary needles, or people who can’t afford hospital bills. This program can lower crime rates of these addicts, however, it will not fix their heroin addiction.

Robusts Verbs- Chemia

Revision:

In Vancouver, heroin addicts  break into cars, rob homes, and steal others’ properties to support their addiction.  The “free heroin for addicts” program provides free and sanitary doses of heroin to drug addicts to safely satisfy their addiction. Even though this program do not prevent them from using drugs, it reduces crime rates and reduces the costs of unsanitary substance abuse to healthcare systems.

Robust Verbs– NamasteBean

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

 

Heroin addicts commit crimes such as theft and burglary, solely to support their habit. A new program in Vancouver “free heroin for addicts,” is taking a counterintuive approach to keep its comunity safe by providing the drug to the addicts. This is expected to lower crime rates and keep heroin addicts off the streets. Even though this approach may make its citizens feel more comfortable, the addicts will not be saved from their terminal habit.

Robust Verbs – eaglessb52

Original Paragraph:

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

 

Revision:

In Vancouver heroin addicts are breaking and entering, stealing, as well as mugging pedestrians to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to save the city from rising crime rates and to keep users out of the hospital. It administers free, clean heroin in a controlled environment. This combats the usage of dirty needles, overdoses, and the ensuing hospital bills from overdoses. An issue that arises is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off the drug, just promote safe usage. This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.

Robust Verbs-muggastackz

Heroin addicts in Vancouver are committing crimes that support their habits. The type of crimes that the addicts commit are breaking and entering and or robbing to have money for more drugs. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything possible to help people who really need it. The programs also keep addicts from using unsanitary needles which will lead them to hospitals. The programs will reduce the amount of crime and reduce the public health by keeping them off the streets by allowing them to receive the drug in the program. The idea behind the programs will help the city but will not fix the addiction the heroin addicts are facing.