Visual Rhetoric Rewrite – Pinkpineapples23

Know your girls :30|Breast Cancer Risk Education| Ad Council 

0:00 – 0:03 – It starts out zoomed in with the spotlight on an African American woman wearing what could be a gold shirt and in the background behind her are multiple African American women gathered around her. As the picture zooms out you can see that the women are arranged in a way like they are taking a picture. They have on coordinated colors of brown, white, and gold and each of their faces are serious. The frame zooms out into darkness.

0:04-0:07 – A new picture is now on the screen. It shows the same main women in the spotlight but this time she is wearing a graduation cap and gown. As the picture zooms out, it shows that she is with her friends who have also graduated. They are taking a picture with the congratulations banner hanging in the back. The screen then fades to black.

0:08-0:10 – Its now night time and the main woman is now seen at home laying down with her pajamas on. Her facial expression shows that she is upset about something. As the it zooms out, she is laying on an older woman, who could be her mom or grandma. And she is surrounded by a handful of her friends who are consoling her. Screen goes back to black.

0:11-0:14 – This picture shows the main character in a wedding dressing holding a bouquet of white flowers. She is looking down at someone or something. As the frame moves out, she is with those same handful of women who are now her bridesmaid. She is looking down at her friend who seems to be helping her with her shoe. Three other women are helping with her veil and the other three are in the corner sitting down taking a picture.

0:15-0:17 – she is now sitting down in a chair holding her child. On the right of her is an older woman who could be her mom standing over her, admiring the baby. On her left is a man, who is sitting on the floor with his arms rested on arm of the chair. He could be her husband or her brother, he is also admiring the baby.

0:18-0:21 – The spotlight is just on her. She is in her natural sate with some makeup on, the focus is from the shoulders up with a gray background. She is upset about something. Her facial expression shows that she is holding back tears. At the end she slowly puts her head down.

0:22-0:23 – As her head is down and her eyes are still closed but her expression still shows she is upset. The way her forehead is wrinkled, and her eyebrows are scrunched shows that she has her eyes shut tight.

0:24-0:26 – She slowly looks up at the camera. Her eyes first and then her head follows. As this is happening words come up on the screen that says, “knowing your breasts can save your life”. Her facial expression now shows that she is upset but also in fear.

0:27-0:37 – the screen is now all black. A website is on the screen with words underneath that say, “for the facts you need on breast health.”

Riddles About Riddles

Just one last word before I go.

I wrote these jokes to make a point.

Version 1
—Knock knock.
—Who’s there?
—Death.
—Death who?
—Seriously?

Version 2
—Knock knock.
—Who’s there?
—Death.
Death who?
—Ultimately, it makes little difference in what form death arrives or by what name we call it. We all go one way or another and while there may be more dignity in some manners of demise, more time to prepare, or less suffering, the ultimate destination couldn’t be more similar: gone and gone and gone forever.

For me, they’re both funny (for you, maybe neither), but for different reasons. Version 1 is funny because it’s quick to point out a universal absurdity. Version 2 is funny because it gets the tone of a knock-knock joke so spectacularly wrong.

In Version 1 we laugh at ourselves for caring what kind of death is knocking. In Version 2 we laugh at the form the joke takes. I think that makes Version 2 a meta-joke, a joke about jokiness.

But that wasn’t my point.

My point was there is usually a way to say what you mean that is perfectly appropriate to your intentions, sometimes more than one, but always many, many, many, many, many ways to get the tone all wrong and spoil the effect you were going for, usually by falling for ready-made language or by overwriting what could be written simply.

My point is that when the chicken crosses the road “to get to the other side,” we laugh at the well-made joke. We laugh at how badly the joke gets it wrong when the chicken crosses the road “to find itself in sudden and much-valued possession of some other-sidedness.”

Which sort of jokes are you writing (Version 1 or Version 2)?

Which sort of jokes are these?:

—How many licensed electricians does it take to screw in a lightbulb?
—Just one.

—How can you tell the difference between an oral thermometer and a rectal thermometer?
—The taste.

Exercise for the Leave a Reply fields below:
Write a joke that gets the tone so wrong that it either dies on the spot or is funny precisely because it upends our expectations.

And if you can’t do that in the time available, just share a good (or amusingly bad) joke.

White Pages- Wildwood

http://www.presidency.ucsb.edu/ws/?pid=51072

An unbiased source is always the best source as we have here. This post delves deep into the history of executive order 12954, written by President Clinton in 1995 that was overturned by the Supreme Court for unconstitutional motives. This source gives all details regarding EO 12954 and puts the Secretary of Labor on the forefront, putting them in charge of enforcing the department to abide by the order. The order allows the secretary to terminate the contract for convenience, but the department head may write to the secretary and explain why the workers were replaced, pleading the case.

http://www.medicareadvocacy.org/old-site/InfoByTopic/Reform/Reform_08_12.04.ExecutiveOrders.htm

This source describes where the executive powers come from within the constitution, which is Article 2 section 1, “The executive power shall be vested in a President of the United States of America.” Also states that there is no explicit text giving the President the executive order privilege. It hits on the two overturned Executive Orders, EO 1034 which was written by Truman, placing the nations steel mills in control of the government to prevent labor strikes to affect the output of one of the nation’s most important good.  The order was also overturned because it was determined that it overstepped the executive branch and into the legislation branch. EO 12954 is the topic of my thesis, is when Bill Clinton in 1995 attempted to bar the secretary to not allow any federal contracts to be issued to any organization that hires replacement employees. Executive order, when issued, normally follow the same language as previous orders to reiterate or revamp the previous directive.

 

http://prospect.org/article/power-act-0

More discussion on Truman’s executive order when he attempted to the seize the steel mills in 1952 and how the courts rules that the order must stem from an act of congress or the constitution itself. That ruling is giving a shape to the free forming executive power and was the only writing thus far regarding limits of executive power. The procurement act of 1949 allows the president and his subordinates to make purchases for the executive branch. Speaks more about different executive orders throughout the years by various different presidents. More recently George W. Bush issued an order requiring federals organization that entered into a contract with the government to utilize electronic employment verification to ensure the workers are legal.

Any White Paper note about a source that promotes a specific political agenda should acknowledge that fact: The American Prospect’s mission is summed up in the phrase “liberal intelligence” that runs under the logo on the magazine’s cover. We aim to advance liberal and progressive goals through reporting, analysis, and debate about today’s realities and tomorrow’s possibilities.

 

https://www.heritage.org/political-process/heritage-explains/executive-orders

The quote from this article speaks volumes and really hammers home what an executive order is. It states the president does in fact have limits on their usage of the order, but does not give exact parameters, much like in reality where there is no specific text holding the president from issuing orders to effect whichever way of life they wish. This piece also hits on another important line that is common when scouring the internet for articles related to the executive orders, it comes from Article 2 of the Constitution when it defines the role of the President and within the article it states, “…take care that the laws be faithfully executed.” This article is interesting because it states that congress has little authority to limit an executive order. Goes into speak about President Clintons executive order and how the federal courts struck it down claiming it exceeded the scope of the presidency. Directly charges the separation of powers as a way to limit the orders coming from the President and acknowledges that the hostility is present. A very useful timeline of famous executive orders is listed with a very brief summary of them. Obama issued the executive order giving amnesty to illegal immigrants, and when the courts stepped in at the state’s request, it temporary halted the order. The order from President Obama is still subject to review of the courts for a long time to come. Health care and gun control were the focuses of President Obamas executive orders and critics claimed he took the easy way out after failing to get laws passed the conventional way. So it brings up the ultimate question of using executive orders if the president is not a good enough politician or statesman.

 

 

https://share.america.gov/how-u-s-presidents-have-used-executive-orders/

This brief article brings up a topic of an executive compared to a memorandum. The stark differences are that the memorandums do not need to be published in the Federal Register unlike the Executive Orders. If the cost of the memorandum exceeds $100 million, then it needs to be released. If not, like every Executive Order passed regardless of the price, the cost needs to be disclosed.

 

https://www.pbs.org/newshour/politics/cheat-sheet-executive-orders-memorandums-proclamations

Executive action is described as a catch all term used for any action taken by the president, including executive orders. Memorandums are much harder to track because they do not have to be submitted to the Federal Register. This source has all of the numbers of which president had the most to least executive orders and categorized by year.

 

https://www.trumanlibrary.org/whistlestop/teacher_lessons/3branches/5.htm

This short and sweet article explains how the Congress could override the President and how the President can override Congress. The President can overrule Congress with a veto but if 2/3 majority of Congress wants to overturn the veto, keeping their legislation moving, then they have that authority. The most common time this comes to surface is when passing budgets. The President and his cabinet are tasked with creating the ideas and also tasked with getting it passed, but of course Congress could vote against. This theory creates gridlock when trying to pass new legislation, so the President has the power to attempt to vote the Congress members out. Truman did so when he was having a difficult time passing any legislation through the house. He campaigned around the country in an attempt to sway voters to call for new Congressmen, which worked.

 

https://www.gpo.gov/fdsys/pkg/CRPT-104hrpt163/html/CRPT-104hrpt163.htm

This piece is the legislation that the 104thcongress passed to nullify Executive Order 12954, prohibiting Federal contractors from entering into contracts over $100,000 who hire permanent replacements for striking employees. William Goodling introduced HR 1176 to the body with an initial cosponsor ship of 29 members, but the day it was ratified, had a sponsorship of 70 members. There had been many hearings in past congresses protecting employers from hiring permanent replacements, until President Clinton introduced EO 12954. There had only been one hearing in the house, heard before the Committee of Economic and Educational Opportunities membership, solely based around the issues raised by HR 1176. The HR bill claimed that the passage of EO 12954 seriously diminished the system of collective bargaining. The foundation is the balancing of the interests and risks between labor and management, so that both parties could agree and move forward from contracts.

 

https://www.thebalance.com/what-is-obamacare-the-aca-and-what-you-need-to-know-3306065

This article describes Obamacare, which was deemed legal through the eyes of the supreme court, which effected about every American. Obamacare requires citizens to have healthcare for 9 out of the 12 months, and if not, you are taxed at 2.5% of your income. That one part of Obamacare alone effects the entire country including people who did not vote for the act to pass. Regardless of how you feel or your political preferences, you would now be mandated to pay the extra tax if you are without healthcare for some time out of the year.

 

https://www.factcheck.org/2013/11/keeping-your-health-plan/

This article dives into the truth behind what democrats said during the process of getting Obamacare into law. Obama said families who were happy with their doctors and providers could keep their coverage. In fact, all democrats, in an attempt to appeal to the public, stated that allowing families to keep their doctors, would be their number one concern. Before Obamacare was even written into law, the dialogue did not demand employers to keep their current plan and allowed them to drop or change plans at will. Roughly 10 million people who would normally be covered by employer provided plans would no longer be offered coverage under one of the proposals. Cost effective plans would no longer be legal due to the new minimum requirements for all plans.  “Americans who purchase such plans on the individual insurance market have been receiving notices that their current plans will no longer be offered after this year…” which is the opposite of what the democratic leaders stated.

 

https://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/daniel_webster_105892?src=t_executive_power

“The contest for ages has been to rescue liberty from the grasp of executive power.” Said by Daniel Webster, a politician elected to The House in the early 1800’s and later elected to the Senate. President Andrew Jackson fired over 2,000 government employees during his tenure and replaced all officials with like-minded men whose beliefs aligned with his thinking. Daniel Webster was staunchly against what the President did and feared that it could set a new precedent for generations to come. Webster believed

 

“…intoxication with their own supremacy…” -President Lincoln when discussing Caesarian dangers to the republic if overstepping continues to be accepted by the general public. Leaders who run on and get elected to President become so self-absorbed and power hungry that they sometimes overstep their roles and not always get caught.

 

https://www.healthinsurance.com/Article/FullArticle?a=183628

The article explains how President Obama helped his Affordable Healthcare legislation get through the house even though many politicians did not agree on it. Obama utilized his executive order privilege to protect certain statues currently written into law regarding Abortion. Executive orders not only shows that the President can force their will onto the citizens with the simple order, but can gain the votes of their counterparts in Congress by a sort of give and take. The President can give the majority leader something they want or something that will make that politicians constituents happy, in exchange for a vote in the Presidents favor.

Defintion Rewrite–Namaste Bean

 Social Media Addiction

       When someone hears the word “addiction,” they will most likely begin picturing a homeless person overdosing on the street, or a scenario fairly close to that. What they will most likely not picture is a young male or female experiencing a fatal accident due to texting and driving. In the dictionary, addiction is defined as “the fact or condition of being addicted to a particular substance, thing, or activity.” More often than not, these addictions can lead to negative effects. Understanding an addiction truly broadens the opportunity to improve the well-being of so many people. So, what is social media addiction and how does it affect its compulsive users?

       We’ve all seen the person looking down at their phone on the highway or the entire group of people ignoring each other because they are on their phones; social media addiction occurs when a person checks/uses their social networking profiles in excess, usually at inappropriate times. In a recent survey, ironically ran on an application, FlashGap found of its 150,000 millennial users that 87% of them have missed out a conversation because they were distracted by their phones. More astounding than that, 54% have a fear of “missing out” if they have not checked their social accounts recently. Just how often do you have to be checking your phone to be considered among these addicts? Go-Globe has found that out of 2.3 billion people using social media, 18% cannot go a few hours without checking facebook. Why is this? Well, Harvard University has found in their studies that talking about yourself stimulates pleasure. So, are you a social media addict because you enjoy checking your account in times of leisure, or is there a certain amount of hours spent on social media to confirm you have a problem?  One can not be so sure, but anything that a person allows to cause interference in their life, such as in school, at work, or in conversation, is when things change from a harmless habit to a destructive addiction. What is for certain is that this addiction has been proven to be stronger than that for cigarettes; as found in a study by Chicago University. Things need to be further looked into, here.

       Research has been done to try and unlock the general personality of a person who is most likely to become subject to social media addiction; Isaac Vaghefi and Hamed Qahri-Saremi did such an investigation at DePaul University of Chicago with 300 young adult participants. What they discovered was based on the Personality Model, which consists of five factors used to measure one’s personality. The five factors being openness to experience, conscientiousness, extraversion, agreeableness, and neuroticism. Out of the five, what stood out the most was neuroticism; the research concluded  that a person who is more anxious and prone to stress vastly increases the chances of them being hooked to social media. On the other hand, people who are more dedicated and attentive, have decreased chances of becoming addicted.

       Obvious, physical effects of social media range from carpal tunnel syndrome to eye strain, but it’s the impact it can have on one’s mental health that is worthy for further research. We already know that persons with anxiety are most likely to be a majority of social media addicts, but will this addiction worsen their anxious symptoms? Castle Craig Hospital in Scotland believes so, stating on their blog titled The Negative Impacts of Social Media

“Your mental health can be impacted where you have a low self-esteem as well as feelings of envy looking looking at everyone’s ‘idealized’ lives on social media.”

This seems logical enough; social media isn’t actually real and that girl you’re so jealous of because of her decor skills is probably three months late on her rent. People only post what they want the world to see, not the raw aspects of their everyday lives. Excessive social media use has also been proven to cause people (specifically young adults) to become less social. Another study by Flashgap found that out of 3,000 participants, 76% of females and 54% of males are guilty of checking their social media at least 10 times when out with friends in real life, social settings.

       Something important to understand about the social media addiction epidemic is that this is only the beginning. Our constant and ever changing needs are what is driving the progression of social media platforms forward. The issue is currently at a stage of relevance; it is becoming more commonly recognized, but actions to be taken to help others minimize the time spent on their phone is scarce. Advice for “turning off push notifications” was given by the Castle Craig Harbor Hospital, but this doesn’t seem effective, as many people already have their phone on silent mode. Could it be that social media will eventually lead its followers to an inevitable social-less, depressed life?

 

References

Saiidi, Uptin. “Social Media Making Millennial Less Social: Study.” CNBC, CNBC, 19 Oct. 2015, http://www.cnbc.com/2015/10/15/social-media-making-millennials-less-social-study.html.

NewMan, Tim. “Unlocking the Personality of a Social Media Addict.” Medical News Today, 17 Mar. 2018, http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/321240.php.

Vaghefi, Isaac. “A Combination of Personality Traits Might Make You More Addicted to Social Networks.” EurekAlert!, AAAS, 12 Mar. 2018, eurekalert.com/.

“The Negative Impacts of Social Media Addiction.” Castle Craig Hospital, Castle Craig Hospital , 2018, castlecraig.co.uk/.

 

Causal Rewrite–NamasteBean

Social Media Use Has Severely Different Outcomes Depending On Whom Is Using

        Why is it that some people can go hours without being in the same room as their phone while others experience anxiety if they have not checked their social media within the last ten minutes? Unfortunately for most, the second scenario is the case.  A new Pew Center Research Survey done in 2018 of the U.S  on social media demographics found that 78% of 18-24 year olds use Snapchat and within that same group, 71% of them check the social platform multiple times a day. That sure seems excessive, but that same study revealed that  68% of adults (25+) in the U.S. belong to Facbook and more than half of those adults “admitted” to at least going on the site at least once a day. This causes confusion on what is considered immoderate; checking your facebook once a day is nothing to be ashamed of. In fact, it’s normal in this day and age. So, what seperates the group of people that can control their social media use and those who are completely indulged?

Let’s first take a look different personalities and how they may affect one’s social media use. Openness to experience, conscientiousness, extraversion, agreeableness, and neuroticism are all factors to help measure one’s personality. In a research study done by  Isaac Vaghefi and Hamed Qahri-Saremi using these five factors, found that people who experience anxiety and stress more often than others (neuroticism) are highly more likely to become addicted to social media. People who are more dedicated and focused (conscientiousness,) are apparently far less likely to become so engufled in their social platforms. Howevever, you can not just lump everyone in these two categories to decipher if they could have a social media problem, it really is not that simple. Being more dedicated than most doesn’t necessarily  keep you safe from becoming hypnotized by your phone. The same research found that people who are generally focused and dedicated could still fall into social media addiction if they also experience stress and anxiety. The same goes for agreeablness and conscientiousness; when a person is empathetic and friendly, they are more likely to use social media in excess and mixed with high levels of dediation, this could vastly increase the likelihood of a person becoming addicted to social media.

If you’re one of the lucky few that do not fall victim to the false world of social media, than the chances of you experincing negative outcomes from the use of your phone are slim to none. Unfortunately for the rest of us neurotics, our mental health could very likey be at stake. Research has found that Facebook has been linked straight to cause sadness and overall low life satisfaction to its heavy users, and this could surely be said for phone applications such as instagram and twitter. Comparing your life to others is something that is done unintentionally when using social media so, when it is happening every day twenty, thirty times a day this can lead a person in to depression. The worst part is, the lives that we are envious of on social media are not true in reality. We only post what we want the world to see; an instagram model may post a selfie every day looking flawless, dressed in the most doiley fashions, but what she may not be posting about is her eating disorder Facebook has been linked straight to cause sadness and overall low life satisfaction to its heavy users, and this could surely bet or the fact that her pictures are highly filtered. This can affect one’s mental health because since they are not seeing the truth, they can not grasp why they can not reach these frankly, untangable standards.

 

References

Vaghefi, Isaac. “A Combination of Personality Traits Might Make You More Addicted to Social Networks.” EurekAlert!, AAAS, 12 Mar. 2018, eurekalert.com/.

“The Negative Impacts of Social Media Addiction.” Castle Craig Hospital, Castle Craig Hospital , 2018, castlecraig.co.uk/.

Schurgin O’Keefe, Gwenn, and Kathleen Clarke-Pearson. “The Impact of Social Media on Children, Adolescents, and Families.” AAP News & Journals Gateway, Council of Communications and Media, 11 Apr. 2011, pediatrics.aappublications.org/content/127/4/800.short.

 

Safer Saws- muggastackz

Source 1: In the article, popularmechanics.com/…673/bosch-reaxx-saw, Roy Berendsohn, author for Popular Mechanics talks about how the safer saw works and how Bosch originally created the saw.

Whether Bosch’s design is too similar is a matter for the courts. There’s no way to know for now how the case will play out. What we can tell you is that testing a saw that won’t cut through your finger is a pretty amazing experience.

We can see that this is an evaluative/proposal claim. The author writes about the experience of safer saws. He evaluates that testing the safe allows the people buying know that this safe is very useful and safe while using the tool.

Source 2: In this article, arstechnica.com/…/patent-disputes-stand-in-the-way-of-radically-safer-table-saws, author Timothy B Lee, talks about how the safer saw adapted and how new rules are being created for the tool. Also, he writes about how safer saw creators are facing lawsuits.

But established makers of power tools vehemently object. They say the mandate could double the cost of entry-level table saws and destroy jobs in the power-tool industry. They also point out that Gass holds dozens of patents on the technology. If the CPSC makes the technology mandatory for table saws, that could give Gass a legal monopoly over the table-saw industry until at least 2021, when his oldest patents expire.

This is a factual claim. The text explains that technology will start to expand and become mandatory in a couple of years. More people will find that the safe is very safe and get rid of their older saws to get the safer saws. The author also gives an evaluative/hypothetical claim that Gass could have a legal monopoly over the saw industry until at least 2021.

Source 3: In this article, cpsc.gov/…es/123115/tenenbaum10052011.pdf, this is a statement from Chairman Inez Tenenbaum of the CPSC regarding the rulemaking for reducing safer saw injuries.

Based on the injury data obtained in the 2007 and 2008 CPSC special study, our staff’s injury cost model projected that consumers suffered approximately 67,300 medically treated blade contact injuries annually in 2007 and 2008—with an associated injury cost of $2.36 billion dollars in each of those two years.

This is a factual numerical claim. This refers to all of the injuries over a year long from the safe. 67,300 were medically treated from the contact within a year apart. The claim helped generates that people are getting hurt and money is being spent to help treat the people.

Source 4: In this article, https://fcir.org/2013/05/16/power-tool-industry-circles-the-wagons-as-disabling-saw-injuries-mount/, the author writes about all of the financial bills that are happening because of the safer saw.

They say the market for popular, lightweight saws costing as little as $100 to $200 would be destroyed by the added expense of SawStop. They note that under some circumstances, SawStop can stop a blade without skin contact–such as when the blade touches conductive materials like metal or very wet wood. In such cases, the owner usually has to replace the blade and an electronic cartridge.

The claim that the numbers of injuries made by table saws and the financial costs. This is an opinionated claim because they think that Gass is ruining other business and tools because the safe-saw would be a high profited item and will be around for a long-term.

Source 5: In this article, https://www.schmidtlaw.com/table-saw-amputation-lawyer/,  this discussion all of the lawsuits dealing with safe saws. They try to explain ways to refrain from using the saw.

Since 2000, a safety device called the “SawStop” has existed that could prevent nearly all table saw amputations, but manufacturers have refused to voluntarily place the safety devices on their products, citing an unreasonable increase in price (about $100 per table saw).

 

This is a factual claim, its main focus of the statement is to make sure people prevent saw amputations. The claim is ethical/moral claim because it blames the creators on why people are getting injuries from the saw. There are strict guidelines in using the saw so the manufacturers shouldn’t be blamed for the victim’s wrongdoings.

 

 

Grammar Exercise- muggastackz

Original

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude toward their child it increases the risk that they’re child will grow up hostile towards others. And its not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is because the children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling lifes disappointments. If you aren’t raised with coping skills, your much to likely to act ‘inappropriately’ then if you have developed more reasonable approaches. The affect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

Revised

Negative attitudes from primary caregivers toward children are risking them to grow up hostile towards each other. And it’s not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse- a large number of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves as well. Children who learn appropriate techniques tend to have behaved positively. Those who aren’t raised with coping skills are much too likely to act “inappropriately” than if they’ve developed more reasonable approaches. This effect of poor parenting reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.