Causal Argument rewrite-kinGGkunta

Crime in Glassboro is on a rampage, or that’s what its crime rate tells us. On average police respond to several calls throughout their shift. On a good day, these calls could mean nothing,  but on other occasions, these calls occur due to robbery, grand theft, rape, drug trafficking, burglary and so on. The severity of these crimes is debatable based on what, how, and why they occurred. Regardless the stats are rising for Glassboro. From Neighbourhood Scout, Glassboro is reported to have a crime index of 16, which implies that, Glassboro is safer than 16 percent of U.S cities. That’s scary if you think of how many cities and towns are in mainland U.S.A, not including U.S territories, and islands. That’s still a lousy number for Glassboro. We all know the popular stereotype about the neighborhoods densely occupied by minorities, and/ or people of color. Well, I hope that did not cross your mind, because, according to Neighborhood Scout, 67.9 percent of Glassboro’s population is white or of European descent, and about 16.5 percent is of African descent. The remainder is either of Asian, Native, Hispanic or of 2 or more races.

It might seem unnecessary knowing all these data about Glassboro, but the purpose is to alert you on the tiny things that contribute to the rising crime rate of Glassboro township. And Yes, I’m aware of my claim, which is, Burglary is the reason why Glassboro has a high rising crime rate. But after weeks of investigating and questioning. I found my hypothesis to be disputable. I realized that the crime rate in Glassboro is heavily influenced by burglary and the other crimes that occur within its neighborhood. Although this town has a high crime rate, it is not among the list of cities with the highest crime rates in the United States. Yet Glassboro’s numbers are higher than the national average of all communities in the United States. Based on the FBI’s findings we can conclude that Glassboro isn’t one of the safest neighborhood in the States. Chances of being a victim to a violent or property crime in Glassboro is 1 in 31. This puts Glassboro with the 10 percent cities with the highest crime stat in New Jersey. With that statement, about 32 crimes are committed per 1000 resident in Glassboro. This data covers Glassboro’s property and violent crimes. But before we continue, let us learn the difference between the two.

On a quick glance, our intuition will tell us property crimes probably consist of atrocities done to people’s property and so on. Well, that’s true, but there is more to it. Larceny, motor vehicle theft, shoplifting, burglary, vandalism, robbery et.c. Property crime are crimes to obtain money, property or some other benefits; according to Property crime from Wikipedia. This definition shows the broad range in which property crimes full under. Violent crimes, according to Wikipedia, on the other hand, aren’t as tricky as property crimes. Crimes that are done with the intention or threat of hurting a victim. Murder, rape, and assault are clear examples of violent crime. Knowing these distinctions between these types of crime, we can continue on our path to discovering which crimes heavily impact the town of Glassboro.

When it comes to violent crimes, the odds of being a victim of one in Glassboro is 1 in 472, which equates to 2 per 1000 residents in Glassboro. Statistically speaking that’s higher than the New Jersey’s average, which includes all its small cities. Despite the high numbers, Glassboro has 0 reports or incidents of murder. While New Jersey’s violent crime tally may indicate the odds of 1 in 408 residents is a victim of a violent crime. But the murder tally for New Jersey is far higher than that of Glassboro. Unofficial numbers show that about 334 homicide was recorded, according to Cohen and Iati from nj.com.  The national average on violent crime is 3970 offenses per 1000 people; that’s a rate of 3.97 in violent crimes. With about 4983 instances of murder in the United States.

On the other hand, the numbers spike up when it comes to property crimes. For Glassboro; as recorded in Neighborhood Scout, 1 in 33 people are victims of a property crime. This leads to about 30 crimes per 1000 inhabitants. Compared to New Jersey state average, which is 1 in 65. This indicates that Glassboro residents are 2 times more likely to be a victim of property crime than any other place in New Jersey.

On a national level, the numbers show that there are 24,510 cases for every 1000 people in the United States. That’s a property crime rate of 24.51. It is recorded that Glassboro accumulates most of its numbers from theft followed by burglary. Theft alone has a rate of 20.97 occurrences per 1000 residents in Glassboro, and 11.35 occurrences per 1000 residents in New Jersey. Nationwide the numbers are 17.45 occurrences per 1000 residence in the United States. All the same, theft has the highest recording in all levels; from Glassboro to the national level. With burglary trailing with about 8.12 occurrences per 1000 people in Glassboro. So saying that Burglary is the major factor that drives Glassboro’s crime rate can be booted out of the window because statistics prove that theft is the leading crime in Glassboro, and/ or nationally.

Other crimes such as motor vehicle theft in the town have low numbers up to 0.91 cases per 1000 residence. It may look relatively small compared to the other crimes in Glassboro, but after combining even the tiniest numbers, they amount to large figures altogether.

 

References

Neighborhood Scout, https://www.neighborhoodscout.com/nj/glassboro/crime. Retrieved 2 December 2018.

Cohen N., and Iati M. NJ Advance Media for NJ.com, https://www.nj.com/essex/index.ssf/2018/01/2017_homicides_shell_do_not_post.html. Retrieved 2 December 2018.

Property Crime. Wikipedia. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Property_crime. Retrieved 2 December 2018.

Violent Crime. Wikipedia. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Violent_crime. Retrieved 2 December 2018.

FBI Releases 2017 Crime Statistics. U.S Department of Justice.

https://ucr.fbi.gov/crime-in-the-u.s/2016/crime-in-the-u.s.-2016/topic-pages/tables/table-1. Retrieved 2 December 2018.

3 thoughts on “Causal Argument rewrite-kinGGkunta”

  1. Let’s start with your first paragraph, King, which, if you’re trying to be a good tour guide, confuses all of us on your tour about our destination. Where do you plan to take us today? Let’s review your opening remarks to see what you’re promising.

    1. Crime in Glassboro is on a rampage, or that’s what its crime rate tells us.

    —Since we’re going on a “Causal Tour,” your essay will guide us to an understanding of WHY there is so much crime in Glassboro.

    2. On average police respond to several calls throughout their shift. On a good day, these calls could mean nothing, but on other occasions, these calls occur due to robbery, grand theft, rape, drug trafficking, burglary and so on.

    —Well, maybe not. Some calls mean nothing. So, maybe you’ll explain why so many reported crimes turn out to be misunderstandings.

    3. The severity of these crimes is debatable based on what, how, and why they occurred.

    —Well, maybe not. It seems you’re going to demonstrate how variable reporting is, and why some people call in false reports.

    4. Regardless the stats are rising for Glassboro. From Neighbourhood Scout, Glassboro is reported to have a crime index of 16, which implies that, Glassboro is safer than 16 percent of U.S cities.

    —No, that’s not it. With such a bad crime rate, this must be an essay about why Glassboro is SO DANGEROUS. It’s LESS SAFE than 84 percent of American cities!

    5. That’s scary if you think of how many cities and towns are in mainland U.S.A, not including U.S territories, and islands.

    —That’s just a random observation. What possible difference could the number of cities make to any argument?

    6. That’s still a lousy number for Glassboro.

    —OK. Back on track. Glassboro is an extremely dangerous town with a lousy crime rate. This essay MUST be about why it’s so dangerous.

    7. We all know the popular stereotype about the neighborhoods densely occupied by minorities, and/ or people of color.

    —This is scary. The author appears to be suggesting that race is the cause for Glassboro’s terrible crime statistics. I didn’t see that coming.

    8. Well, I hope that did not cross your mind, because, according to Neighborhood Scout, 67.9 percent of Glassboro’s population is white or of European descent, and about 16.5 percent is of African descent. The remainder is either of Asian, Native, Hispanic or of 2 or more races.

    —Well, now I’m just confused. The essay could be about why there’s so much crime in Glassboro, or why the statistics are fuzzy, or why people report crimes falsely, or how Glassboro’s rate compares to the vast majority of other towns, or why the amount of crime makes life here so dangerous, or why it’s NOT about race. So, what is it about?

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