If primary caretakers have a negative attitude toward their child it will increase the risk of the child growing up to be hostile towards others. A large number of children raised by abusive parents harm themselves and act out aggressively towards others. Abuse creates a negative behavior due to the abused child not learning the appropriate techniques for handling life’s disappointments. When a child isn’t raised with necessary coping skills, they are much more likely to act inappropriately in comparison to a child that has developed reasonable coping skills. The effect of poor parenting, as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone raises the child they deserve.
Strong work overall, Pink. This paragraph would fail just twice for fatal (FFG) grammar and punctuation errors. You needlessly added a problem by substituting versus for the simple comparative than that was already in place. Versus has its place, but this isn’t it. Find and fix the problems?
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I have horrible grammar I am sorry. I will definitely fix everything.
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Actually, yours was among the best in both classes.
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Is this revision better?
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