Grammar Exercise- Alpacaqueen

Original:

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude toward their child it increases the risk that they’re child will grow up hostile towards others. And its not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is because the children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling lifes disappointments. If you aren’t raised with coping skills, your much to likely to act ‘inappropriately’ then if you have developed more reasonable approaches. The affect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

Revised:

Primary caretakers with negative attitudes towards their child increases the risk that the child will grow up hostile toward others. And it’s not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse- a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. Children who learn appropriate techniques for handling life’s disappointments behave positively. Those who aren’t raised with coping skills, are much too likely to act “inappropriately” than if they’ve developed more reasonable approaches. The effect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers,” is that all parents get the children they deserve.