Rebuttal—beachgirl04

Dehydration; there’s a lot more to it

We give little thought to water, the fluid that preserves our health, maintains our body temperature, prevents headaches, and most importantly, keeps us hydrated.For many water is the only way to stay hydrated for daily living or strenuous activity. Overwhelming evidence proves that water maintains the equal body temperature needed for healthy blood flow and that performance suffers for athletes who don’t drink enough water prior to an event.

Even though water is the go to drink, it is the easiest type of drink to get no matter where we are and it is the most important fluid that enters our body. There are still people who refuse to drink water, say it is not the best fluid to keep us hydrated and argue that there are other fluids that can do a better job than water. Some of these arguments could be true, but could only be true to some. If there are individuals who do not need water in order to live a healthy lifestyle and do not become dehydrated without water then they happen to be lucky, hard to find individuals.

As researched prior it is important that one drinks at least 8-ounce glasses of water a day in order to maintain a healthy lifestyle and stop themselves from the awfulness of dehydration. The long lasting idea that anything other than water such as iced tea, coffee, tea, and sodas dehydrated you and to stay away from them. However, a recent study found that no scientific studies were found in support of 8 x 8. Rather, surveys of food and fluid intake on thousands of adults of both genders, analyses of which have been published in peer-reviewed journals, strongly suggest that such large amounts are not needed because the surveyed persons were presumably healthy and certainly not overtly ill. This conclusion is supported by published studies showing that caffeinated drinks (and, to a lesser extent, mild alcoholic beverages like beer in moderation) may indeed be counted toward the daily total, as well as by the large body of published experiments that attest to the precision and effectiveness of the osmoregulatory system for maintaining water balance (Valtin, 283). With that being said, it shows that maybe 8 ounces of just water are not needed daily in order to keep an individual hydrated and without those 8 ounces a person will not become ill. It also brings forth something that not many people know and that is that all of those caffeinated drinks such as iced tea, coffee, and soda can be counted towards the total of how much fluid you are consuming daily that contributes to hydration.

When it comes to achieving any goal there are always strategies to do so. For example in order to be hydrated each day people set strategies such as drinking a certain amount of water by this time, the next amount of water 3 hours later and so on so that they can make sure they are hydrated each day and drinking the amount of water that their body requires. Some beg to differ, for example there was an experiment done to examine the effect of various combinations of beverages on hydration status in healthy living males. The men consumed different combination of beverages including beverages that were carbonated, caffeinated caloric, non-caloric and coffee. Before this took place body weight, urine and blood were measured as well as afterwards. There was no significant differences in the effect of various combination of beverages on hydration status of healthy adult males.Advising people to disregard caffeinated beverages as part of the daily fluid intake is not substantiated by the results of this study. The across-treatment weight loss observed, when combined with data on fluid-disease relationships, suggests that optimal fluid intake may be higher than common recommendations. Further research is needed to confirm these results and to explore optimal fluid intake for healthy individuals (Grandjean, 591-600). This is another counterargument to my thesis that only drinking water is the key to staying hydrated each day. Since there was no significant difference in the males being studied who were drinking all different types of fluid compared to the ones who were just drinking water, it makes us question what are these different fluids doing to our internal organs that need water each day? That study disagrees with those individuals who come up with hydration strategies and believe those strategies are not necessary.

Within this argument, sports and strenuous activity have been important because hydration is even more essential to those individuals compared to others because dehydration can effect their performance. The main aim or aims of sports drink consumption do vary according to the exercise situation, but are likely to be one or more of the following: to stimulate rapid fluid absorption, to supply carbohydrate as a substrate for use during exercise, to speed re- hydration, to reduce the physiological stress of exercise, and to promote recovery after exercise. Water is not the optimum fluid for ingestion during en- durance exercise, and there is compelling evidence that drinks containing added substrate and electrolytes are more effective. Increasing the carbohydrate content of drinks will increase the amount of fuel which can be supplied, but will tend to decrease the rate at which water can be made available. (Shirreffs, 25-28). Taken from that, water is not the best drink for athletes to drink during their strenuous activity like it always has been, there must be other fluids that they incorporate in order to keep their performance up because if not their body can shut down and not perform to the best of their ability.

There is simply no way that anyone can avoid drinking water completely and still live a healthy lifestyle. There may be some days that one does not need to drink as much water as another day and can consume the other beverages such as soda, coffee, or alcoholic beverages but those fluids need to be combined with the consumption of water. Dehydration will always be as bad as it is made out to be because of how it effects the inside organs of your body, it takes a toll on you. Dehydration may affect some worse than it affects others, but it will never be a positive effect always negative.

References

Grandjean AC, Reimers KJ, Bannick KE, Haven MC. The effect of caffeinated, non-caffeinated, caloric and non-caloric beverages on hydration. J Am Coll Nutr. 2000;19(5):591–600. PubMedCrossRefGoogle Scholar

Shirreffs SM. The optimal sports drink. Schweizerische zeitschrift fur sportmedizin und sporttraumatologie. 2003;51(1):25–30.

[I followed the link you provided to Google Scholar for this source, BeachGirl, and discovered I was still one click away from the material. Here’s the actual link you should be using: https://ssms.ch/fileadmin/user_upload/Zeitschrift/51-2003-1/06-2003-1.pdf

I could anchor it to the title for you if you like, but you’ll benefit more if I demonstrate to you again how to do it for yourself. You’ll need the skill for your Bibliography.]

Valtin H. “Drink at least eight glasses of water a day.” Really? Is there scientific evidence for “8× 8”? Am J Physiol Regul Integr Comp Physiol. 2002;283(5):R993–1004. PubMedGoogle Scholar

18 thoughts on “Rebuttal—beachgirl04”

  1. Hey, BeachGirl, I don’t usually make style notes on first drafts, but now that this post is being revised, we can start to look at language refinements.

    Your first sentence is actually a bunch of sentences crammed together with commas between them, known to grammarians as comma splices.

    Here’s where the sentences break out:
    1. Obviously, many know the importance of water
    2. It is the fluid that helps you stay healthy, maintains body temperature and prevents headaches
    3. Most importantly water is what keeps individuals hydrated daily.

    You could combine them cunningly if you like:
    We give little thought to water, the fluid that preserves our health, maintains our body temperature, prevents headaches, and most importantly, keeps us hydrated.

    That sentence also eliminates the Banned 2nd Person language we’re not allowed to use in academic essays: you, your, yours, yourself, yourselves.

    Another good trick for avoiding grammar trouble is to “depopulate” our writing. Use no more pronouns than absolutely necessary; also, don’t put them into motion. So, instead of all the little critters running around staying and living and preparing in your sentence: “For many water is their only option when wanting to stay hydrated whether it is to live their daily lives or when they are preparing for strenuous activities.”

    You trim down the actors and the actions to:
    For many, water is the only way to stay hydrated for daily living or strenuous activity.

    You close out your paragraph with a sentence so long it should be complete, but which does not resolve itself into a complete thought, a word-string known to grammarians as a fragment.

    “With the amount of overwhelming evidence emphasizing the fact of how important water is whether it is to maintain an equal body temperature so that our blood flow is healthy or how performance is effected for the star athletes who do not drink enough water prior to an event.”

    Simplification is the key to avoiding fragments, too, BG.

    Overwhelming evidence proves that water maintains the equal body temperature needed for healthy blood flow and that performance suffers for athletes who don’t drink enough water prior to an event.

    Is this valuable?

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    1. Very valuable, Professor. I am not the best when it comes to wording, I always put extra words that are not necessary. Thank you!

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    1. P1. We give little thought to water, the fluid that preserves our health, maintains our body temperature, prevents headaches, and most importantly, keeps us hydrated. For many water is the only way to stay hydrated for daily living or strenuous activity. Overwhelming evidence proves that water maintains the equal body temperature needed for healthy blood flow and that performance suffers for athletes who don’t drink enough water prior to an event.

      In this paragraph, BeachGirl, you claim that “for many,” water is “the only way” to stay hydrated. But that claim is unclear. It might be a factual claim that such individuals can truly only achieve hydration by drinking water. But more likely you intend it as a claim of belief: “Many consider water to be the only appropriate beverage for hydrating.” You point to evidence that water is VERY EFFECTIVE, but you don’t conclude one way or the other whether other beverages might achieve similar benefits.

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  2. [Is my rebuttal argument organized effectively?]
    Organization is not the primary trouble, but in general your paragraphs are so long they defy the conventional wisdom that every paragraph should address just one main idea. Organizing your material will be much easier when smaller paragraphs develop one theme each and can be moved into places in an imaginary outline.

    [Does the evidence I used in this argument do the job it is supposed to?]
    Yes and no. You wander back and forth across the Water-is-the-best/Other-fluids-are-just-as-good line, so it’s hard to tell sometimes WHAT you’re trying to prove. Only when we recognize your clear claims can we decide that the evidence serves you well (or doesn’t).

    Let’s examine your paragraphs one at a time first, in a Reply below, that will dissect the work into manageable chunks.

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  3. P1. We give little thought to water, the fluid that preserves our health, maintains our body temperature, prevents headaches, and most importantly, keeps us hydrated. For many water is the only way to stay hydrated for daily living or strenuous activity. Overwhelming evidence proves that water maintains the equal body temperature needed for healthy blood flow and that performance suffers for athletes who don’t drink enough water prior to an event.

    In this paragraph, BeachGirl, you claim that “for many,” water is “the only way” to stay hydrated. But that claim is unclear. It might be a factual claim that such individuals can truly only achieve hydration by drinking water. But more likely you intend it as a claim of belief: “Many consider water to be the only appropriate beverage for hydrating.” You point to evidence that water is VERY EFFECTIVE, but you don’t conclude one way or the other whether other beverages might achieve similar benefits.

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    1. Is what you are saying in this paragraph I need to make it clear whether it is water that is the only effective beverage to hydrate individuals or if other beverages can do the same thing that water can do for individuals?

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      1. What I’m saying, BeachGirl, is that when you drop a VERY specific claim into the middle of your paragraph:

        For many water is the only way to stay hydrated for daily living or strenuous activity.

        your reader has more questions than answers. Who are these many? Do they include the author of this paragraph? For others, what ways are there to stay hydrated?

        You can make whatever claims you like, but they need to reconcile and support one another.

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  4. P2. Even though water is the go to drink, it is the easiest type of drink to get no matter where we are and it is the most important fluid that enters our body. There are still people who refuse to drink water, say it is not the best fluid to keep us hydrated and argue that there are other fluids that can do a better job than water. Some of these arguments could be true, but could only be true to some. If there are individuals who do not need water in order to live a healthy lifestyle and do not become dehydrated without water then they happen to be lucky, hard to find individuals.

    In your second paragraph, BeachGirl, you create confusion about which is your position and which positions belong to others. The confusion is particularly important in the Rebuttal essay, in which you’re supposed to identify the strongest position(s) contrary to your own and refute them. Those counterarguments need to be represented by the best source material you can find. They need to be credible and authoritative (otherwise they wouldn’t threaten your own point of view). Here they’re represented instead by the phrase, “There are still people who refuse.” Even as you present their material, you’re not giving them credit for having a valid position.

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  5. P3. As researched prior it is important that one drinks at least 8-ounce glasses of water a day in order to maintain a healthy lifestyle and stop themselves from the awfulness of dehydration. The long lasting idea that anything other than water such as iced tea, coffee, tea, and sodas dehydrated you and to stay away from them. However, a recent study found that no scientific studies were found in support of 8 x 8. Rather, surveys of food and fluid intake on thousands of adults of both genders, analyses of which have been published in peer-reviewed journals, strongly suggest that such large amounts are not needed because the surveyed persons were presumably healthy and certainly not overtly ill. This conclusion is supported by published studies showing that caffeinated drinks (and, to a lesser extent, mild alcoholic beverages like beer in moderation) may indeed be counted toward the daily total, as well as by the large body of published experiments that attest to the precision and effectiveness of the osmoregulatory system for maintaining water balance (Valtin, 283). With that being said, it shows that maybe 8 ounces of just water are not needed daily in order to keep an individual hydrated and without those 8 ounces a person will not become ill. It also brings forth something that not many people know and that is that all of those caffeinated drinks such as iced tea, coffee, and soda can be counted towards the total of how much fluid you are consuming daily that contributes to hydration.

    As with your earlier paragraphs, BeachGirl, readers here will be confused which side of the argument you’re on. FIRST you seem to claim that the eight 8-ounce glass regimen is legitimate. THEN you claim that a recent study finds no evidence to support that claim. THEN you discount that claim with the speculation that the test subjects must have been very healthy, suggesting that for anyone else the regimen is still valid. THEN you offer another set of studies that promote the value of fluids other than water. YOU APPEAR TO CONCLUDE that 1) the 8/8 regimen is not needed; 2) other fluids can contribute to the 8/8 fluid requirement.

    Do you see why we’re confused?

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          1. It’s essential that you create Revised posts for all your short arguments, BG4. You should have a Definition Argument and a Definition Revised. Etc. You’ll move two Rewrites into your Portfolio (for example your Causal Rewrite and your Rebuttal Rewrite) along with an early draft of each (your first Causal Argument and your first Rebuttal Argument) for comparison. So you need two posts for your short arguments.

            More specifically, YES, you should save this as your Rebuttal Revised, so you have two posts to show in your Portfolio.

            Does that answer your question?

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