Rebuttal Essay -KinGGkunta

Crimes dwell in our neighborhoods; it is as if they are the stronghold of our societies since the time of our ancestors. Just the other day there was a synagogue shooting in Pittsburgh; this adds up to the numerous mass shooting cases our society face- In 2 years, 2017-2018, the U.S have had about 639 incident of a mass shooting(Courtland). In 2016 the U.S had a 4.1 percent increase in violent crimes, while crimes on properties fell to a 1.3 percent, which includes the 19.1 percent overall burglary rate in the United States (2016). The United States saw a flashing number of about 1,515,096 burglaries, in other words, a 4.6 percent decrease in the numbers of 2015 (Crime). Even though the numbers look huge, compared to the total population of the United States, crimes on properties are heading in the right direction. Crimes such as burglary which is on a steady decrease according to the 2016 FBI crime report statistics. Burglary cases are dropping steadily because of the new innovative technology that helps us keep our homes safe even when we are not around. Home securities, along sides our law enforcement officers, have done a swell job at keep burglars at bay.

Let’s take a look at the City of Old Bridge, a small suburban neighborhood in North- Central Jersey with a population of about 66,673 according to the 2016 census. Old bridge has a crime index of 65, which implies it is safer than 65% of U.S. Cities. Just like Glassboro, the demographics of Old Bridge is slightly similar, except Old Bridge has a larger population than Glassboro, yet Glassboro has a higher crime rate than Old Bridge. It may seem that the absence of a huge college institution such as Rowan University in Old Bridge can be a key to the low crime rates in Old Bridge. What if the absence of a huge institution such as colleges, and so on is not the reason for Old Bridge’s low crime statistics, rather it is the characters of the mass population of its habitat that make a huge difference. Old Bridge as we know has one of the largest high schools in the State of New Jersey, way bigger than Glassboro high, and might be three-eight the size of Rowan University. In 2016 four of Old Bridge district Schools earned National School of Character, which puts Old Bridge in top 10 National district of Character in the state of New Jersey. Sizes do not matter when it comes to the fact that we have a city with high burglary rates when nationwide, burglary rates are steadily dropping. Take a look at the stats from Glassboro’s neighboring community, Williamstown; just like Old Bridge, it has no huge institutions present, and it has lower crime rates than Glassboro.

Have we looked into the other factors in the crime report? It is as if burglary is the only crime in the report. Ultimately burglary is not the reason why crime rates are sky high in Glassboro because, in reality, it is people without character in Glassboro that are driving crime rates up in the city of Glassboro. The national statistics for burglary occurrences are on a steady decline, but Glassboro, on the other hand, is receiving the opposite stats for this same crime. Security and preventative measure are adopted into our society regularly. You can believe all these innovative, and improved technologies are made available for everyone including people living in Glassboro. We can see that their problem is not a technological one, but one of character. It is safe to assume that the people living there need to be vetted, maybe stricter policies should be imposed on Rowan University. Also, more police officers patrolling the neighborhood would scare people who are on the verge of committing a crime. Take a look at Old Bridge, it has numerous police officers patrolling the streets of Old bridge daily, and I must say it seems to be working, hence the low crime rate. Also, we may believe that Glassboro is or isn’t a crime infested city, well think about the tribulation they have to deal with, with these obnoxious young adults running wild in the streets of Glassboro. Cases including assaults and harassment are generally high in areas closest to Rowan University.

 

Reference

Courtland, J. Mass shootings in the U.S.: When, where they occurred in 2018. ABC 15 ARIZONA. https://www.abc15.com/news/data/mass-shootings-in-the-us-when-where-they-have-occurred-in-2018 . Accessed 29 October 2018.

Crime in the United States. U.S Department of Justice. FBI. CJISD. https://ucr.fbi.gov/crime-in-the-u.s/2016/crime-in-the-u.s.-2016/topic-pages/burglary . Accessed 29 October 2018.

Old Bridge Township Public Schools. https://www.oldbridgeadmin.org/Page/10711 . Accessed 31 October 2018.

2016 Crime Statistics Released. https://www.fbi.gov/news/stories/2016-crime-statistics-released . Accessed 29 October 2018

 

 

2 thoughts on “Rebuttal Essay -KinGGkunta”

  1. Hey, King. You dumped all your essays into Feedback Please at the same time, and I will most certainly help you with all of them over the next day or so, but for now I’m trying to respond to Rebuttal requests from you and your classmates first. Thank you for your patience. Let’s look at what we have here.

    Technical Note: We don’t do this.

    In 2 years, 2017-2018, the U.S have had about 639 incident of a mass shooting (Courtland).

    No parenthetical citations. To attribute this material to Courtland, name Courtland in your own sentence.

    According to J. Courtland’s ABC 15 news report out of Arizona, since 2017 there have been 639 mass shooting incidents in the US.

    Or something of that nature.

    You’ll need to be more careful with your statistics too. You appear to be mixing apples, oranges, and pinenuts in this list:

    a 4.1 percent increase in violent crimes

    that’s an INCREASE of 4.1%

    , crimes on properties fell to a 1.3 percent

    this MIGHT BE a decrease BY 1.3%, or it could be a decrease TO 1.3%, but 1.3% of WHAT?

    the 19.1 percent overall burglary rate in the United States (2016)

    and this is just mysterious. What’s a 19.1% burglary rate? Does it mean 19.1% of homes are burglarized?

    Most likely, these are all CHANGE statistics, King, but you don’t present them as such so readers get lost. Probably

    violent crime increased by 4.1%, while property crimes fell by 1.3%, including a stunning 19.1% decrease in the number of burglaries in 2016.

    But you follow that up with a MUCH LESS impressive separate claim about burglaries, that they fell by 4.6 percent in 2015. If you want to make the most of these numbers, you should offer the bigger change last. Like this:

    Nonviolent property crimes are in steep decline. For example, nationwide, according to the FBI’s “Crime in the United States” report, the number of burglaries in America went down by 4.6% in 2015, a stunning decrease for any single year, followed by a whopping 19.1% decrease in 2016.

    See what I mean?

    I’m going to bother someone else for awhile. Respond here and leave your post in Feedback Please. I’ll return when I’ve heard from you again.

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