00:00 – 00:01
Within the first second we can right the way notice a big white house with the white picket fence and well maintained green bushes around the house. Also we can see how well the grass is cut on both sides. We can predict that people who live there have a good, high paid steady jobs in order to take care of the house. I would consider themselves as upper mid class. This house appears to stand by itself and not to be surrounded by other houses. We could even conclude that this house was constructed by current customer’s behalf. By looking at the shape of this house we could conclude that it was build fairly recent. The big red front door in the center makes us to look directly at the center of the shot and not wonder around at first. We can see the side walk with a middle age woman moving towards the entrance. She is wearing a post mail worker uniform that suggests that the current time of the day either early morning or mid afternoon on the any day except for Sunday. She is holding something in her hand, something small to deliver.
00:02 – 00:03
In this second we can see a big shot of the woman’s face. She is holding several white envelopes. The angle of the camera is shooting above her head, making us to see her concentrating on some image slightly above her, perhaps in the window. Her face impression appears to be surprising. She perhaps sees something that attracts her attention.
00:03 – 00:06
At this time we looking inside the window from outside point of view. We can see a male’s arm flexing. His arm is fully covered with tattoos. This guy could be a tattoo artist! He also has big muscles which leads to believe he works out and has a very healthy lifestyle. His skin looks young so we could assume he is in his thirties. He is wearing a black tank top, which makes us think that he is plan on staying inside. He also has a long black hair going down up to his waist. He looks like a rock star, so he could be a part of a local singing band. I would assume he played an electronic guitar.
00:06 – 00:10
Within 4 seconds we can see close up the man’s face. His body is going side to side in the dancing matter. He is also moving his mouth and it looks like he is singing. He is looking down below him what makes us think that he is doing what he is doing to show it to someone who is siting on the floor or way shorter than him. It could be some sort of pat, maybe a dog or a kid.
At this second we can see a little girl. She looks like she is about 8 to 11 years old. She also looks like this man, so we could assume his is her father or uncle. She is repeating after him, his dance moves and a song they are singing to each other. She looks very engaged in this playing activity with the guy. She looks very happy.
We finally see them both in the shot. They are standing facing each other and continue on with their dancing. The room looks very clean and colored in pink color. It looks lik the liven room to me. We can see the pink, kids size bicycle on the bottom left. It has to belong to a little girl. She likes to ride it and stay very active.
In this part both a man and a little girl are sitting on the floor. She is holding a plastic keddle toy. She is about to pure some imaginary tea for him and herself. Now it we can clearly assume that both of them are just having a good time playing with each other.
00:27 – 00:34
The screen picture changes to a black screen with #makeamoment writing on it. Now it all comes together that happy moments are in our control, so we could make those moments of happiness. Make happiness be happy.
4 thoughts on “Visual Rhetoric–Wisemann101”
I’m not sure how best to help here, Wisemann101 because I don’t know enough about your background to judge whether your mistakes of grammar and usage are those of a new learner of English or more mundane errors. I want to be respectful and generous, but I’m obligated to enforce collegiate standards for Academic English usage. So, for just the first entry (00:00–00:01), I’m going to make corrections and identify the changes in bold.
Please let me know how you’d like to proceed from here. You might need to betray your own anonymity by telling me who you are so I can be better informed.
CHANGES IN BOLD
In the first second we can see right away a big white house with a white picket fence and well–maintained green bushes around the house. Also we can see how well the grass is cut on both sides. We can predict that the people who live here have good, high–paid, steady jobs in order to take care of the house. I would consider them upper middle class. This house appears to stand by itself strong>not surrounded by other houses. We could even conclude that this house was constructed on the current owner’s behalf. By looking at the shape of this house we could conclude that it was built fairly recently. The big red front door in the center makes us look directly at the center of the shot and not wander around at first. We can see the sidewalk with a middle-aged woman moving towards the entrance. She is wearing a letter carrier’s uniform that suggests that the current time of the day is either early morning or mid–afternoon on any day except for Sunday. In her hand,, she is holding something small to deliver.
I haven’t received a reply from you since October 17, Wisemann, so I have to conclude you’re just ignoring my original question and advice.
I can’t help you much if you don’t respond.
I reiterate that the grammar and usage problems I identified in your first paragraph are serious and fatally damage the overall quality of your observations. If you can fix them, and the countless others that appear in the rest of your paragraphs, please do. You don’t want this in your portfolio as it is.
Something else occurs in the video that you don’t mention that can’t be overlooked. The mail carrier reacts quite clearly to the man’s posture (which she can see through the window) as if she thinks his is “flexing and posing” as a bodybuilder might in a competition. She’s amused and also admires what she sees. This leads the viewer to draw the same conclusion. We are peeking into the home of someone quite egotistical and impressed with himself.
So the surprise comes when he turns out to be playing “teapot” with his daughter. Not posing to show off his muscles, but pretending that his arm is a “spout.”
Any analysis of the video that didn’t make that observation (and any others that you can find) would be seriously flawed.
Save this as your VISUAL REWRITE. Make substantial corrections and improvements. Then save it again.