1. concussions in football
Step 1. Your topic is too broad. Almost certainly. And because it’s too broad, you won’t be able to write anything surprising, insightful, or new about it. Too many commentators have already made broad general comments about: concussions in football.
Obviously, you can’t just gather a bunch of material about concussions in football under the title “Concussions in Football” and call it a research paper. A topic that broad would require at the very least a full book, with chapters devoted to:
- how concussions occur inside the skull
- clinical evidence of harm to players
- numbers of concussions in different eras
- football injuries compared to other sports
- cumulative effects of repeated injuries
- depression and suicide among retired players
- denials by the league
- lawsuits by the players’ association
- rules changes to mitigate dangerous hits
- helmet design to reduce injury
- rejection of youth football by parents
- alternatives to equipment and rules changes.
Any one of those narrower topics might still be too broad for a 3000-word essay. So:
Step 2. Narrow your topic by limiting the range of your terms, and by adding elements that focus your attention to specific aspects of your topic.
2. concussions and helmet design in NFL football
You’ve decided to concentrate on the relationship between helmet design and concussions—a significant narrowing of your topic—but we still don’t know how the two are related. So:
Step 3. Create a logical relationship among the elements of your increasingly complicated topic description.
3. the effect of improved helmet design on the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games
So far, so good. But “the effect” is so vague that it has no real meaning. If I say, “Lighting a fire in the corner had an effect on the temperature in the room,” I’m going out of my way to avoid the very obvious logical connection: The fire raised the temperature in the room. So:
Step 4. Write a complete sentence that makes a bold, clear claim by clarifying the logical relationship between the specific elements in your narrow topic.
4. Helmet designs that act like shock absorbers to reduce the impact of helmet-to-helmet blows will reduce the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games.
Now you’re making claims. Your narrowed topic has focused our attention on specific elements: NFL players, helmet-to-helmet blows, design improvements, reduced numbers of concussions. Let’s test it.
Step 5. Share your claim with several classmates. Do they all agree? Will readers automatically concur that your claim is logical, reasonable? If so, your thesis is entirely intuitive, and therefore probably too obvious. Perhaps trivial. Most likely, it’s already been demonstrated by other authors. If not, it will be soon.
This is where the real work begins. Rise to the challenge. Question the essence of the specific claim you have made.
5. Eliminating helmet-to-helmet blows would radically reduce the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games.
This may look like a step back, but it’s actually a shift to a different perspective. It questions what seemed like a natural and obvious conclusion.
- Players used to play without helmets.
- Then they graduated to leather helmets, which mostly prevented split-open scalps.
- Then they graduated to hard plastic helmets with interior suspension systems that kept skulls from colliding with other skulls and other helmets.
- But with all that innovation, we still have mounting evidence of widespread lasting damage.
- It’s not skull-on-skull damage that matters.
- It’s the collision of delicate brain tissue with the inside of the skull.
- And no helmet can protect the brain from colliding with the skull.
Step 6. Apply counterintuitive thinking to find the unexpected angle.
6. Eliminating helmets from NFL games would reduce concussions more than helmet improvements by making players very reluctant to engage in the most dangerous plays.
It’s a radical hypothesis that may be impossible to prove, but it can certainly be researched. And it makes for a surprising and innovative argument much more likely than the alternatives to result in a rewarding semester of study.
More or Fewer Steps. Your own process may require more than 6 steps, but never fewer. If you start the process with a bold, clear claim that creates a logical relationship among specific elements in an already narrow topic, you’re starting at Step 4. (You didn’t skip the steps; you took them without noticing.)
The Real Work. The most important work begins at Step 5, when you’ve crafted what you think sounds like a good thesis. Further scrutinizing that thesis is painful but essential. We don’t want to abandon our comfortable thesis that seems so provable. But we learn more when we stop trying to prove something and instead research to learn something.
We Research to Test, not to Prove. In the early stages of your research, you’ll search for evidence to prove or disprove the counterintuitive claim you make in Step 6, which is merely a Hypothesis you’ll measure against the academic sources you discover. Almost certainly, you’ll alter your Hypothesis, perhaps several times, during the writing/research process, narrowing or redirecting your claim as you figure out what you can persuasively argue.
The Payoff. A research project that results in a Thesis radically different than your first Hypothesis is doubly rewarding. It indicates that you found a Thesis to prove; more importantly, it demonstrates that you’ve grown academically throughout the course by learning something unexpected.
Task: My Hypothesis
- In a new post, name a broad topic that you’re willing to invest 12 weeks researching and writing about. That will be Step 1.
- Title your New Post: My Hypothesis—Username (substituting your actual username of course).
- Follow all the steps of the illustration above, refining your topic until it resembles a counterintuitive thesis worthy of Step 6.
- You will not be stuck with what you commit to in this Exercise; however,
- until you deliberately update your Hypothesis, it will be your research project of record. In other words, I will consider you committed to today’s Hypothesis until you replace it with another.
- BEGIN THE WORK IN CLASS TODAY so that I can see you know how to post to the blog and Edit your post.
- COMPLETE THE WORK by 11:59pm MON SEP 10.
A completed Exercise will look like this:
- concussions in football
- concussions and helmet design in NFL football
- the effect of improved helmet design on the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games
- Helmet designs that act like shock absorbers to reduce the impact of helmet-to-helmet blows will reduce the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games.
- Eliminating helmet-to-helmet blows would radically reduce the number of concussions suffered by players in NFL games.
- Eliminating helmets from NFL games would reduce concussions more than helmet improvements by making players very reluctant to engage in the most dangerous plays.